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Connective Tissue

I am prone to writing scenes at the end of works in progress and then filling in connective tissue later, if at all. So far it’s going well–got from point C to point D, and point A to point B, and now if I can just get B and C to line up, we’re good. Although so far the connective tissues is a lot of talking-about-what-we-are-going-to-do and not many swashes have been buckled, so I don’t know how that’s going to hold up. May have to have somebody fall into a pit. You can never go wrong with pits.

And I think I found about 700 words that are just plain maundering around and need to die, though I’ll keep ‘em around at the end in case I find the hole they want to fit in.

 

Best lines so far:

“You’re wanted by a crime lord!” said Caliban.

“Not that it’s any of your business,” snapped Slate. “And that was years ago! He’s probably forgotten.”

“Oh no,” said Brenner. “Dearie, dearie me, no. You don’t forget being jilted at the altar because you just handed the priest a warrant for your arrest on the charges of horse-buggering.”

“I am curious,” said Learned Edmund, “as to how you actually managed it. There are seals on a warrant, as I understand it, and those are kept entirely by the judiciary.” He steepled his fingers. “Even assuming that the entire thing was prepared in advance, you would still need access to the seals—“

Slate’s grin broke through, and she beamed at Edmund. “Thank you. I have been waiting for five years for somebody to appreciate that.”

 

 

And I finished the illustrations for Dragonbreath 9. (pant, pant, pant.)

Wordcount: 5700

Originally published at Tea with the Squash God. You can comment here or there.

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Er... yes.
Slate is a SHE... kinda hard to bugger horses without... help?

Slate being female does not clarify the sentence. It still reads as if the crime lord handed the priest the warrant for his own arrest. Maybe if it was "someone" who handed the warrant instead of "you", then I think it would be clear from context that the someone was Slate. Although I think it would be even funnier if "your bride" handed the warrant, as that would imply that Slate had gone as far as agreeing to marry the crime lord before publicly humiliating him in this way.

This is the way I was sort of leaning but ...

Actually, the crime lord IS the one who handed the priest his own warrant. So it does work in context, I guess--just needs the context! *grin*

"His own warrant" still does not perfectly clarify why "your arrest" should not be "his arrest". But I suppose that's what buying the book is for.

The crime lord handed the priest the priest's warrant? Or the crime lord's warrant? I'm still not quite clear on the "his own".

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